Friday, March 16, 2012

TRIFEXTRA: 'LOST'

This post is in response to this weekend's Trifecta Trifextra challenge. 
Write a story entitled 'Lost' in exactly 33 words. The word 'lost' can only appear in the title, not your 33 words. 

LOST

She forced her eyes open. Heavy. With every blink the pain intensified. Agony. Her brain was foggy. Confusion. A kind face, a gentle voice. “The surgery is over. You did just fine.” Relief. 

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  1. Oh, I remember this feeling. We can never get those hours back, nor would we want to. But, it is SO confusing to wake up and be so confused. Great take.

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    1. I know what you mean. Thanks for reading. I really liked your take as well!

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  2. Hmm. I never would have thought of that! Good imagery!

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  3. I can see this especially after an accident.

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    1. Awww! I was hoping this would fit into the last 7 cures! ;) thanks!

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  4. :( And we both just keep these themes alive. Well done.

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    1. Thanks. Yep, our recent exchange did inspire my thoughts for this. I find that writing about it is a little therapeutic.

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  5. Nice take on the prompt. Definitely lost after surgery.

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  6. A different approach. Totally able to relate.

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    1. I was hoping for a different approach. Thanks for visiting!

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  7. It does feel like we're lost when waking from surgery. Didn't think about it that way before...

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  8. Love what you brought to this.
    Wouldn't have thought to use that imagery for the word.

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    1. Thanks, Guapo! Yes, been on my mind lately, so I thought I would write it out. ;)

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  9. Oh, this was an excellent take on the prompt. Having recently undergone my first colonoscopy, I remember Lex in the recovery room, smiling and reassuring me that all was well... Good work! Peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/03/17/lets-get-lost-trifecta/

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    1. Thanks, Amy! I really enjoyed your piece as well. ;)

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  10. I was so afraid for her. I liked the way you let us realize what was happening as she did. It made her easy to connect with in such a short space.

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  11. That moment of waking up, muddy brained, can be scary and disconcerting.

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  12. Like so many of the others, I have to say that this was a surprising, but very successful, response to the prompt. It's very apt. Nice job. Thanks for linking up and hopefully see you for the weekday challenge starting on Monday.

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    1. Thank you so much! I'll definitely see you!

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