Thursday, May 3, 2012

Trifecta Writing Challenge: The Perfect Storm

This post is in response to Trifecta's weekday challenge. They ask that you write a story using the third definition of the given word that is between 33 and 333 words in length. Usually for the weekday challenge, I stick closer to the 333 words. This week, I wanted to try something different. So, I decided to use the given word in a 33 word story. Enjoy

thun·der noun \ˈthən-dər\

1: the sound that follows a flash of lightning and is caused by sudden expansion of the air in the path of the electrical discharge
2: a loud utterance or threat
3: bang, rumble <the thunder of big guns>

The Perfect Storm
The storm rolls in, rattling and illuminating the window panes. 
The thunder of frightened feet stampede down the hall. 
Two trembling, little bodies nuzzle in, 
surrounded by the safety of their mother’s arms.

33 comments:

  1. perfect

    we had tornados here a month ago.

    The thunder little feet, including the ones of the dog and cat were down the stairs ina hurry.

    I loved this.

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    1. How nerve-wracking. Glad you all are OK. Thanks for the compliment! It means a lot. :)

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  2. Love the play of the storm against the the thunder of the feet. Very good.

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  3. I love how you worked in a storm, but still used the 3rd definition of thunder. Good job.

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  4. Ah, the kiddies hopping into bed. Mommies have the power to dissolve the fear right out of them!

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  5. So sweet. And I also liked the play with the thunderous background and the thunder of those little feet.
    Thanks for playing, come back for the weekend prompt.

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    1. Thanks. I was hoping people would catch that. :)

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  6. AWWWWW! How cozy! I love that feeling! We huddled down in our basement during a hurricane last year.

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    1. It can be scary, but good that the kids find us as their safe place.

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  7. Storms and the thunder of feet. Neat. Nice piece. I can picture them running down the hallway.

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  8. Short and sweet! Makes me long for a good, loud storm and my kids young again.

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    1. I secretly look forward to a good thunder boomer for this reason alone. ;)

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  9. That's lovely. I like how you combined the storm with a different kind of thunder.

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  10. I love the thunder of little feet. It's amazing how easy it is to read their mood based on the sounds those little feet make at night: pattering out to peek if Mommy & Daddy are still up or the thundering dash to safety after a fright.

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    1. Isn't that the truth! Amazing how Tge sound of their footsteps can tellus so much.

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  11. This is beautifully written.

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  12. Awww... I really like this one! Moms and kiddos can relate!

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  13. Great job, great imagery!
    Really like the way you answered the challenge.

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  14. I almost went the same way with a short one this time. Was even going to do thunder of not-so-little feet. Then, I got a different idea.

    I really like this one. I like how you used thunder in a short vignette ... about thunder ... but you used the word in an altogether different way. Ironic and interesting.

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    1. Thanks. I had a few ideas but kept coming back to this one. Trying to write down as many sweet little moments as I can...in a creative way. Fortunately, this word allowed it. :)

      Thanks for the compliment and your thoughts. I can't wait to read yours!

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  15. It's funny - I decided a while back that the proper collective noun for a group of small boys is a "tornado." This reinforced that thought, in a completely different way. You painted a very sweet picture here.

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  16. Aw, that was a touching moment in the wake of a storm.

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