Tuesday, November 13, 2012

The Trail of Tears

Did you guys know that it's Trifecta's one year anniversary? To celebrate, they are doing something a little bit different. They placed us into pairs (teams) and then gave us a prompt. Member A of the pair had a little over a day to write 33-100 words in response to the prompt Trifecta posted. 

Then Member A will pass the baton to Member B of the pair and that person has to add 33-100 of their own words to Member A's response. Are you still with me? 

When I saw Trifecta post about pairing up, I immediately told asked my friend Michele from ODNT if she would pair up with me. After she couldn't ignore my pestering any longer agreed to take on this challenge with me, we got started. 
And here is the prompt Trifecta presented to us (in italics) that we were instructed to complete: 

Charts and optimal dates and preferential temperatures. One line or two. As if she could summon whatever it is that makes up the human soul as easily as she could a cab on a busy New York avenue.

And just like the cabs that passed her by, ignoring the urgency in her body language, she felt herself losing hope that she would never get to where she desperately wanted to go. Maybe those missed moments were meant to steer her in another direction?  She feared waiting too long and with each step forward, she began  to lose sight of her original plan. Luckily, she had left a trail of tears along the way to help guide her back.


 Sadly though, she was completely unaware of the heat wave that would soon befall her fair city. And the same tears that COULD have carried her home now sizzled on the steaming pavement beneath her feet, disappearing into the air and creating a fog that would serve to blind her and lead her forever astray.


  1. Fabulous job Mel! You really have a way with words. Can't wait to see where Michele takes it.

  2. This is a lovely, powerful start! I can't wait to see how it ends!

  3. Great closing line. Excellent handoff to your partner. Well done.

  4. Being passed by and missing moments... wide open for the finish!

  5. This sounds like she's gone through some heavy stuff. I can't wait to see what Michele does with this (although, I have some guesses!) Funny, I came over here over an hour ago trying to read and comment and my work kept interrupting me! It's so annoying when that happens!

  6. "those missed moments were meant to steer her in another direction?" I often think that way. The trail of tears adds to the sadness. Tag, Michele. You're it! Can't wait.

  7. forfget smokey robinson's tracks of my tears, I want to see where the trail leads us.

    Good work mel. I know your partner will crush the next 100.

  8. Geez, I feel sorry for the poor sap who has to follow THESE words. Good luck keeping up, slack jaw. Try not to drop the ball, mouth breather.

    Wait ...

  9. A fantastic set up!
    Nipping over to see how it ends...

  10. Loved that last line, a wonderful segue for part two.

    1. Thank you so much, Tara. I really enjoyed yours!

  11. Perfect. You really did a great job with the prompt.

  12. The trail of tears to guide her back is especially sad.

  13. Morning,
    some of these are hard to read...but what I will tell you is that from me, who has that track of tears ingrained on my cheeks is that your words were just right. I often felt like my body was ignoring me, that my hopes and wishes were falling on deaf ears.

    then Michele..yes, sometimes that path is so far different from the one you think you'll be taking.

    Both of you did such a great job with this, I felt every word.

  14. Trail of tears. Oh dear. That's really sad. You ladies did an excellent job with this prompt. We love your enthusiasm and your humor. Thanks for helping Trifecta celebrate.